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minutia_r ([personal profile] minutia_r) wrote in [personal profile] osprey_archer 2022-04-07 06:09 pm (UTC)

It's interesting that you seem to have written this blurb in James's voice; that's not something I generally see done, although it does give more of the flavor of the story than the more usual run of wikipedia-neutral-point-of-view. I wouldn't end both sentences in the third paragraph with "..., too" though.

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